When I personally write in first person a lot, but there's one issue that we seem to run into, right? How many times can you begin a sentence with "I"? Too many.
I took a deep breath and sighed before I crossed my arms. I was giving in and I knew it. I wanted nothing more than to run away and forget all about it, but I couldn't. I was a prisoner here.
Now, every sentence there begins with "I", but can't we change that? Can't we also make it sound more interesting? Let's try.
The wind whistled as it pulled my hair, making my sigh all but inaudible. My arms became tangled as I folded them over my chest. I was giving in. My greatest desire was to run away and forget about it. No longer did I want to be a prisoner here.
Okay, so my writing is a tad bit formal, but you get the gist. You can reword things. Don't start every sentence with "I" and it will capture the reader's attention better! Just ignore the fact that that example sucked! :P
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